It's that time of week again :) Yeah, a little less preamble this time, let's get right to it. This is also from Red Herring. Feedback appreciated very muchly! Thanks in advance :)
Outside on the street, the cars whizz by us, fast, fast, fast. Outside on the sidewalk, people stride by us purposefully, hurrying, rushing, speeding. Outside the world whirrs on.
Inside the car though, we have a temporary safe haven.
It is quiet, with Cherry sitting in the driver’s seat and me on passenger side, neither one of us talking or daring to break the silence.
Through Cherry’s window, I can see the police station across the street. Uniformed officers stride handsomely in and out of the building. I can’t look any more, and opt to stare blankly out my window instead. My breath leaves fuzzy little blobs of fog on the window. I lift a finger and draw lines through it.
“So...” Cherry begins.
“So...” I echo. I seem to be doing a lot of that these days, dumbly repeating the words of others.
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7 comments:
very intriguing. I'm wondering what they're doing outside the police station...casing the joint?
I do love the contrast between the outside world and their save haven. A very sweet teaser!
Wow! Long one, I love it!!
Here's mine if your interested: http://bookmarkyourthoughts.blogspot.com/2010/06/teaser-tuesday5.html
This is awesome. Definitely want to read more :)
Would definitely read more, to see why they're outside the police station--and of course, what comes after "So"
Ohh why did you end it there?! I want to read on hehe. Awesome tease. Lovely first paragraph btw :)
Short but sweet. Great teaser :)
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